chapter 8
Precise:
Entering the slaughter house required heavy gear. While walking through you see people quietly cutting cow’s throats with out any expression on their faces. Workers injured, sexually harassed and told to take hormones, all of which is secret because these people are illegal immigrants
Gems:
"I stop and try to absorb the whole scene: the cool breeze, the cattle and their gentle lowing, a cloudless sky, steam rising from the plant in the moonlight. And than I notice that the building does have one window, a small square of light on the second floor. It offers a glimpse of what’s hidden behind this huge blank façade. Through the little window you can see bright red carcasses on hooks, going round and round”
Response:
I love how dramatic this quote is. The author went through a lot to get this bit of information. And it shows how sickened he was and how sickened he is trying to make the reader.
Sarah,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your enjoyment of Schlosser's dramatic writing.
Your precis' and gems and thoughts were all fine. Could certainly be improved/deepened/compressed more.
One suggestion for improvement - add more vivid detail. For instance, in the family food post, you describe your mother substituting cheaper food products for healthier ones - provide examples. Mention if anyone noticed.