Leticia,
Your project gave an extremely emotional personal narrative. You showed a parallel between your experience with the United States medical care and the standard prenatal storeys.
You used your personal voice which made it entertaining. You balanced the use of informal language and formal language to create a persuasive argument.
"(What!...he just a dam intern, I thought Dr. Tanner is my doctor. I was mad)."
This was later used as a connection to how the system goes about prenatal care. You used this project not only to critique the standard practices of birth care in our countries but to critique the standard practises of health care in general.
Although your personal narrative was persuasive and apt, it leaves me curious about finding personal narratives from pregnant women receiving prenatal care.
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Abdullah,
You conducted a throw interview with a social worker for PATH.
It is evident that you actively inferred things while interviewing. This can prove to be a struggle when interviewing someone. you show this when you say, "(I wanted to tell him that taking a mother to a hospital when her water breaks is not the best thing to do but I digressed)"
One thing that may have added to your work would be referring to the pamphlets that Mr.C gave you.
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Amanda,
You artfully use statistical evidence to demonstrate the deferent needs they have. You discuss the available programs and assistance they can obtain.
This could at some point relate to any girl that I know. It is a serious issue that you address well.
although your writing was very informative, It would have been nice to hear a personal narrative from a pregnant teenager. Yet understand that is extremely difficult to find.
Abdullah,
You conducted a throw interview with a social worker for PATH.
It is evident that you actively inferred things while interviewing. This can prove to be a struggle when interviewing someone. you show this when you say, "(I wanted to tell him that taking a mother to a hospital when her water breaks is not the best thing to do but I digressed)"
One thing that may have added to your work would be referring to the pamphlets that Mr.C gave you.
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Amanda,
You artfully use statistical evidence to demonstrate the deferent needs they have. You discuss the available programs and assistance they can obtain.
This could at some point relate to any girl that I know. It is a serious issue that you address well.
although your writing was very informative, It would have been nice to hear a personal narrative from a pregnant teenager. Yet understand that is extremely difficult to find.
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